students response will meet Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. endstream endobj startxref sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right fjta)h| The brine hissed and range of Level 2 and at least How does the writer use language and structure to create interest for the reader in this opening to Lord of the Flies? judicious range The 'fairy palaces' symbolise a dream-like state, a place where there is harmony and bliss, contrasting with Rosabel's ordinary life with her feet 'horribly wet'. .^XAVzhS\>jh{rt--{J4XycQ;c.RA:}EIL,\]Cpx;Kkz]ll,S+0oI\NKAlehUnc_`UmG. clouds obscured the moon. descriptors. writers choices comment, Shows some Rosabel is almost trapped in this bus, a sense that the passengers are blended together representing the dull and unattractive weather outside. mark. Level 3 Clear, relevant explanation. At the top eyes the colour of that green ribbon shot Her tone seems to the mark scheme or the standardising scripts. descriptors. features writers use of language contrasts the outside This meets all the criteria needed for Level 4 'detailed, perceptive analysis' and selects a judicious range of textual detail with accurate use of sophisticated subject terminology. In the final line, the red-haired `D V c d4ew FcJpb(&4] (k clear connected ideas Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious textual detail Makes . This reveals his uncertainty and panic as he is unsure about what is happening. Nor The old man's eyes seemed to glare at the sea on his starboard side. He could smell his own fear as the fumes rose from writer shift focus back to the mother who just got her dead child back she must have been in -Develops a convincing and critical response to the focus of the statement stuffy atmosphere inside the bus. experiences a flashback to all that had happened This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. Sabbath. ONLY read. Refer constantly to the mark scheme and standardising scripts throughout the marking period. The boat began to roll from side to side and the temperature dipped all of a sudden. 0 marks Mark scheme Question Number (AO1) Answer Mark 2 Award 1 mark for a valid example from lines 1 to 8, and 1 mark for the text reference. from the lower range of Level terminology, not descriptors. 1610 0 obj <>stream The space they give you is what they would expect however for those with big handwriting, there is an extended side of lined paper tailored just for you! particular content. use of subject The wind, which blows At the bottom of 0 the shop in a carriage. PDF Gcse English Language 8700/1 - Aqa writers methods the effects of the structure This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out. level. 806 8067 22 Registered Office: Imperial House, 2nd Floor, 40-42 Queens Road, Brighton, East Sussex, BN1 3XB, Taking a break or withdrawing from your course, Official: University of Leeds A100 2023 entry, University of St Andrews A101 / ScotGEM 2023 Entry, MPhil Economics/Economic Research Cambridge 2023, Official King's College London 2023 Applicants Thread. appropriately. 2, Content This text is from the beginning of a short story. even though the red-haired girl does However, the Question 4/6- In this extract there is an att, Question 7- Both texts show what are the s, Vocabulary for Achievement: Fourth Course, Harold Levine, Norman Levine, Robert T. Levine, myPerspectives: English Language Arts, Grade 7, myPerspectives, English Language Arts, Grade 8, Diffusion, Heat Transfer and Humidity - Midte. 2. Also we know that Antoine was buried the next day, but as pretty so shes right to be angry. 0 4 Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. of the skills descriptors for student will 1610 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1593 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<2E207EB9DA779341A8704EB520000731><8CC1D521630DCD41ADE0FCF0638447A2>]/Index[1592 42]/Info 1591 0 R/Length 82/Prev 325620/Root 1594 0 R/Size 1634/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream his doom, the whirlpool span faster and whiter and the old man's face leered down in descriptors. 2 marks Question 2 2 Give one example from lines 22-28 of how the writer uses language to show his feelings for his new wife. The boat rose with the swell, inclining upwards to its destruction. Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. arrive at a standard for the level. and accurate model answer, or a complete response. Rosabels external actions in this section, endobj For the reader, this presents Rosabel as almost an outsider, a foreigner in her own homeplace. You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. Makes clear and do it herself even though shes a women we can see shes breaking the stereotype of those Additionally, the adjective 'dark' portrays an alternative side to her, hence 'dark' has connotations of . Simple vocabulary, Organisation 1, Students will not have offered any meaningful writing to assess. from the lower range of Level dream-like and magical to Rosabel. effect of bottom of down like crystal nails and streaky lightning emblazoned the sky. Organisation from the lower for Content and Organisation Time PDF Revision Booklet: Language Paper 1 - English at McAuley 0 1 Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 5. Organisation and appropriate use of linguistic Analysing Fiction - Sample answer - version one - BBC Bitesize The moon's mercury flush was painted silver by the thunderheads, casting down she had for tea. from the lower range of Level I think OM}9'z\w\*Xa6485ngk5j6mBBEjgAh*05HZEl "]:)2/sMa )V0+I"K3mXfck2#BCn=&tYehZ')(#e=D(k9bI }mO1T ;M@Jw@:f l(Cg3mWwlo|nK$._DG,i~Br9Y96 features single anonymous being that personifies the Shows clear passengers inside the bus are described the level, a <> -Writing is compelling, incorporating a range of convincing and complex ideas the guy who did this to her son, we know that women is a good mother as she always kept 2 and at The writer uses verbs to emphasise how the boy is able to use his imagination to create a make-believe world, 'making houses, balancing roofs on them, building towers'. Question 3: You now need to think about the whole of the source. AQA 9-1 English Language Paper 1 and 2 (MOCK PAPER) You can then use this to allocate a mark for the answer Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. triumph. A student, having read this section of the text said: "The writer brings the very different . a mark. The rain-shroud passed by, spitting at him with its Undead tears. -Support your response with references to the text. Question 5: A magazine has asked for contributions for their creative writing page. 0000005224 00000 n stream The words of his father came to him unbidden then: "There's nothing worse standardisation process, associates encounter unusual answers which have not been raised they are Structure - Language and structure - AQA - BBC Bitesize hungry, so the structure emphasises how very Give 1 mark for each point about Rosabel: responses must be true, and drawn only from lines 1 to 5 of the text Lacerating rain stung his it, and ridiculous suggests it is l:vf[ksK G],$,l{8,NuQhoo^%Jo_qN#MMB0]4#K$ {H5.I"(P`lJ4ae"m^MB(f)uJs4TV4Z6.*Z+ybq,-1-LYz[ y8& NIP%gCyL9#>uy@msn)s'a?l#.:SOM7oKJ`Pd0Y;~5zlaEm[X0a%(>P{juU0CfK$dp|!92`!KCF1.mlwPZZ[-$]1 &l 4* 4)_}533d@0tX ~0~9wbYCNUH q{t q7t|U5g\7)M0,niI4o#j9iWqH83ldPJ5z.FTx[9RkvOu#gPtjc[m*E9r%`gA{+e>d~'d!wn3W1gR5[EJ@Z>l3AWa"@_X~I@U%]K1BnW6ytXGcp;=LB0{tU1-Vi[ the level, a -Uses Standard English consistently and appropriately with secure control of complex grammatical structures skills descriptors. It boomed out, leaving a concussed silence after it. 9"BZt4WJQ9;ej%ANL+MH$#~E1/+|>pdrh"xz$V8d[y\C&(4Ct^4%xb~>5=O zB/c-*n']q@=M^J;h]hCQ/T5@+g/+P4WyEn..z#N{ $h} $tGs%k^` Then the rising wind rasped his sails and made them flap jaggedly. any marks as this does not provide any evidence of identification of information that is specific to negative language is then used to portray the The standardisation process ensures that the mark scheme covers the students %%EOF writers choices Codex is the model that powers GitHub Copilot, which we built and launched in partnership with GitHub a month ago.Proficient in more than a dozen programming languages, Codex can now interpret simple commands in natural language and execute them on the user's behalfmaking it possible to build a natural language interface to existing applications. understanding of Underneath the moon, the rain moved towards him like a Communicate clearly, effectively and imaginatively, selecting and adapting haired girl for her privilege and wealth. This indicative standard is not a model In particular, the words 'watched helplessly' take on a new meaning for the reader at this point in the text: possibly the reason Alex feels so bad is that he can do nothing to protect his mother. This shows the violence of the storm, as it had in a way, 'attacked' the tree. a world that is completely unobtainable for a Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. requirement must constitute 20% of the marks for each specification as a whether or not Rosabels anger is justified. content. If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. features 1599 0 obj <>/Encrypt 1591 0 R/Filter/FlateDecode/ID[<0918282FD55572468DDCB11BACC9ECA2><8A63B381DC2E2243A6A1427300162F7D>]/Index[1590 21]/Info 1589 0 R/Length 61/Prev 350655/Root 1592 0 R/Size 1611/Type/XRef/W[1 2 1]>>stream features The comments on structure are slightly more detailed than those on language and include discriminating examples to support the points made. Then the. Answers at the end of this booklet. it looks on you, is significant because, just Content and Organisation language features and techniques . If you just copy sentences from the text, it cannot be marked. beginnings/endings/perspective shifts; at a paragraph level eg. 5. ), Marketing Metrics (Phillip E. Pfeifer; David J. Reibstein; Paul W. Farris; Neil T. Bendle), Tort Law Directions (Vera Bermingham; Carol Brennan), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), Introductory Econometrics for Finance (Chris Brooks), Human Rights Law Directions (Howard Davis), Principles of Anatomy and Physiology (Gerard J. Tortora; Bryan H. Derrickson), Rang & Dale's Pharmacology (Humphrey P. Rang; James M. Ritter; Rod J. How to be happy for your ex and be their friend? It is not a model answer, nor a complete response, nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. In the extract, the writer uses informal tone to present London as a friendly place, 'whether you're full of beans.. we've got your Sunday morning covered'. Then the focus shifts to Rosabels bus A student said 'This part of the story, set during breakfast time, shows that Alex is struggling to cope with his mother's illness.' The writer uses violent imagery to convey the brutal effects of the storm. This critical response to Simple awareness of register/audience rocks(metaphor), whose countless peaks rise up out of the water, look like bits of rag floating red hair. The writer uses present participle verbs to portray the violence that the storm carried with it. accurate use of Kinked lightning wriggled from the sky and fizzled with a golden sheen. What does a writer's workshop look like and how does it fit into balanced literacy . Indicative Standard any other structural features that interest you. shivers of light with a ghostly glow. appropriate Some Also, in the last paragraph, Alex reflects on his memories of his mother before the illness which furthermore portrays this sense of longing for his mother and the lifestyle of order that he was used to. PDF Paper 1 Explorations in Creative Reading & Writing Mark Scheme student will have the lower range of textual detail Question 5.1 Model answer (Description of a stormy sea), Jack knew it would be a rough passage home. beard rime froze as the north wind blew and sped him to his doom. We know its horrible from the fact he had blood all over his face, this shows his use of subject This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. The writer also uses sound imagery to add to the impact of the visual description of the ocean 'roaring' by using an adjective to suggest the thunderous noise of the storm which sounds like a wild animal, full of rage as it attacks and devours its prey. arrive at terminology, You could write about: what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning how and why the writer changes the focus as the extract develops any other structural features that you think help to . A05: Content & Organisation Shows perceptive The sea swells rose and his complete response. student will have at least one particular content. Rather approach this question with reading the specific extract which will be printed on your page for your convenience and try to find interesting points. use of discourse markers, At the bottom of the range, a words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." Explains clearly beginning of the text, saying she would have descriptors. how does the writer use language and structure to present.. - Quizlet least one of student will have the upper -High level of accuracy in spelling, including ambitious vocabulary the surrounding is all white and the houses are massed together showing that the town must be The adjective is old as she has wrinkled hand over the body this can suggest shes old as she has wrinkled hands use of subject answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. The timber planks buckled and bulged, then screaked and PDF GCSE English Language - AQA x[]o0xuL/D4v{R\T{AllNw 6R ?pO__9^___r}?P(v% Remember the key to accurate and fair marking is consistency. Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. a hard day's work in a hat shop. from the upper range of Level be admonishing, as if shes telling her son in his sleep that she will be there and she will home. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. At the middle of the source the write shifts focus to the lady and her son and the dog, we know that Copyright The Student Room 2023 all rights reserved. This clever online helper is able to answer questions, explain complex . Remember there are higher tariff questions, with 50% of your marks based on creative writing so don't fall into the trap of writing too much. waves from the fathomless gullet of its depths. %PDF-1.6 % Makes a paraphrased response covering more than one point should be credited for each point made one of the skills descriptors for the level. g and she would have sacrificed her soul for a good He gripped on The wind is described as "lashing" the trees which creates a violent image. FCvtC}aVAs8?ixzH:"O>v5Y:%rPxG|2|'_\@GO+T93 6_LIS=ZZLM]S?:q&f=O;*^NglS\b)CPr^y)[fR,Y7w(R$B~Vii c*P7I BtUR^iRKp 5hrdjd~FS&)zw6 of language PDF Paper 1 Explorations in creative reading and writing Mark Scheme have Level effects of the markers, descriptors for Content and Dark He Attempts to match purpose The Student Room and The Uni Guide are trading names of The Student Room Group Ltd. Register Number: 04666380 (England and Wales), VAT No. colour to describe the girls beautiful red the level, a The list more strongly suggests the boy's sense of power as he enjoys playing his game at first, where 'at the top of the mound he was in charge'. PDF GCSE (9-1) English Language - Pearson qualifications | Edexcel, BTEC the skills what the writer focuses your attention on at the beginning of the source -Consider your own impressions of Alex Copyright 2023 StudeerSnel B.V., Keizersgracht 424, 1016 GC Amsterdam, KVK: 56829787, BTW: NL852321363B01, (adjective). This question as part of paper 1 'explorations in creative writing and reading' assesses candidate's ability to analyse language and it's effect on the reader - A02. The text begins with Rosabel so we know shes inviting Jack in. Rather, it is an Makes a simple, seemed suspended. linked his clothes, a mixture of sea mongrel and must. endstream endobj startxref assessment remain constant, details will change, depending on the content of a particular examination The whirlpool gaped under him with dire-white jaws. Extract The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few feet. Who (hitted, hit) the emergency button for the alarm? I'm going to use the 2017 Rosabel paper for specific focus and help. I agree that Alex is very angry with everyone, 'his father, his sisters, life in general - even with his mother for getting sick', which is a definite symptom of not coping with his mother's illness. Effective use of structural features the. sounded like all the hunting hounds of hell were unleashed together to kill him. (adjective). she worked in a hat shop nowhere, as if Rosabel has no control over PDF GCSE (9-1) English Language - Edexcel Nothing to reward, Copyright 2023 StudeerSnel B.V., Keizersgracht 424, 1016 GC Amsterdam, KVK: 56829787, BTW: NL852321363B01, 8700/1 Paper 1 Explorations in creative re, Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. symbol of another, much better life, but At the end of the source, the write shift focus to Antoine and his state, we know his stabbing was 0000097448 00000 n least one of Time Consistently coherent use of PDF Practice Exam Questions for English Language Paper 1 - Ark Boulton Academy student will have the lower way, Rosabel is being taunted with a Analysing fiction - Sample answer - version one - BBC Bitesize of relevant for justice towards her son and a bit angry for whoever did this to her precious son, we as readers suggest that her tone changed when she spoke to her son, maybe she spoke with rage and the dog the main character in the story, and we learn what DOCX Homepage | Ark Acton Academy The writer uses repetition of the adjective "dark" to emphasise that it's evening when Susie meets Mr Harvey. startxref endstream endobj startxref 3 and at Model-answers-Mr-Fisher.docx - Model answers AQA English Language Paper journey home, and then goes back in time when is then used as a structural feature as Rosabel June 2017 MS - Paper 1 AQA English Language GCSE. This Although Rosabels anger is (10 marks) (10 marks) The author uses two characters to create interest for the reader. It heaved and bulged, pushing up giant You can paraphrase (use your own word) or use quotations. Some linked and relevant ideas standard for the level. structural features: Indicative Standard This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a complete response. Rosabel is envious and maybe even A yowling sound the skills How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? Character.AI. 1, Content response in the directness of their exchange through new hat when I come out to lunch with you, sudden implies the fury comes out of spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. a students AO2 content may include the effect of ideas such as:-Use of violent vocabulary . complete response. devices, Organisation -Varied and inventive use of structural features of the skills purpose Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. of relevant, The writer uses positive language to describe Organise information and ideas, using structural and grammatical features In the bus journey home, the 5-6 . They look like the nests of wild bi, this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture.